Monday, February 22, 2010

The Unbearable Lightness of Haiku

Haiku (俳句 haikai verse) listen , plural haiku, is a form of Japanese poetry, consisting of 17 moras (or on), in three metrical phrases of 5, 7, and 5 moras respectively.[1] Haiku typically contain a kigo, or seasonal reference, and a kireji or verbal caesura. In Japanese, haiku are traditionally printed in a single vertical line, while haiku in English usually appear in three lines, to parallel the three metrical phrases of Japanese haiku.[2] Previously called hokku, haiku was given its current name by the Japanese writer Masaoka Shiki at the end of the 19th century.
- culled from Wikipedia

Haiku is perhaps one of the most disciplined forms of poetry.  The verses encapsulate an imagery that is structured within a specific number of syllables.  It is beauty defined in brevity, a moving emotion captured inside the concept of conciseness.

Eternal Wanderer is therefore rightly intimidated. Will Eternal Wanderer even dare to attempt writing such a powerful yet distilled art of words?  He is scared at the daunting prospect, but nonetheless, he tries his best  with  the task to hand.

Hence, he shares with you the fruit of his first ever endeavor to write a haiku.  It eloquently bespeaks about the emotion of embarrassment from sharing too much information.

Lust rains summer on my face.

I lick your sweetness - yum!

Crap. Overshare.

P.S.  Eternal Wanderer realizes now why he can never be a poet - ever! AHAHAHAHA have a good week ahead, y'all!


  1. But it is eloquent, as it is candid. I must echo your sentiments. I find the haiku as disciplined as it is exactingly brief. My verbose nature prevents from any forays into this ancient, yet challenging, medium of poetry. I must salute you!

    Brevity is one skill I fail at developing. To put in a few, when emotions runneth over.

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  3. so ngayon sinong mas burikat sa atin?

    heheheh PAM-PAM

  4. 7,6,4.

    NANI?!?!?! That's not even a tanka, you philistine!

    @ lost travailer : Mating season, you say? I am in a rut, but not that kind of rut.

  5. Red: aw. you're but too kind, my good sir :P

    Lost: mating season? sheesh, it's a haiku! lolz

    Clipped: dili uy kay dalisay, busilk ug mayumi man ko hahaha

    Rude: hey, at least i tried, you know what i'm saying?!


  6. @ Ternie: Thanks, here's one for you.


    Ternie writes a poem
    Speaks of sweetness and of lust
    Ends with my disgust.

  7. lol victor and i were talking about haikus one time. sabi nya it was only a matter of time before people would start posing haikus. haha the one you have here is just pure genius! haha

    i once saw a coffee table book na puro haikus. it was written by a guy na nagcheat yung boylet nya of 8 years. parang recovery or soemthing. masaya naman. hehe

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  9. I remember, the first literary piece I've ever written is a Haiku about a cat. :)

    Nah, you're already eloquent with your words.

    WV: Syllynes

  10. kitams. kung anu-ano ang mga natututunan dito kay ternie. hay.

    tsk tsk tsk.

    love your ternie!!! =P

  11. shoutouts to ruddie, hahaha! dyan ka magaling. mwah!

  12. City: trust me, that's what you get fo having an utterly boring sunday hehehe

    Travailer: i. am. dalisay. busila. and. mayumi lolz

    Galen: aw. chenkyu hihihi

    Engel: tseeeeh kaaaaaaa hahahaha

    Darc: weh. never fails what? ehehehe

    John Stan: dabah?! lolz

  13. well, at least there something in between those eyes naman pala, not just something between the legs...


    tama ka, because of the minimal number of syllables per line: andun ang beauty nya, andun din ang pain at hardship.

    but try this: instead of personally describing what you feel, use what you see as a metaphor to describe the sensation.

    the key here is uniqueness: something na never before used
    (ex. rain has always been associated with sexuality)

    keep writing!

    PS. 39, M, KSA...

  14. Red: ganun ba?

    19 m qc. preskong presko. di pa bilasa. dalisay, busilak and mayumi. walang kokontra.


  15. oist, wala sa edad ang pagkabilasa!


  16. *clap, clap, clap* I applaud you on your experimenting. Very 'in-your- face'... like snot splattered on it! LOL!

  17. Conio: no, it was my pleasure to read your entries ;)

    thank YOU for passing by and leaving a comment! :D don't be a stranger :)

    Bon: lolz@snot

  18. i dont normally go back agfter ive commented to a post but i did check this one now

    a pleasure? hmmmmmmmm!!!!!

  19. Conio: they don't call me pleasure for nothing ;)

    call me >>> 0917-LUSTY-ME


  20. hehehe. like kid caught with his hand inside the cookie jar. haha.